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To know the crescent moon by =ilovemybishies87:iconilovemybishies87:



Orihime had a lot of time to think while she was in Las Noches. There wasn't much more she could do, besides stare at the reversed crescent moon hanging high in the sky outside her window. On occasion, she would try engaging her stone-faced guard in some, or any, type of conversation.

That usually ended in failure.

Almost immediately she'd likened Ulquiorra to the crescent moon, though perhaps for the wrong reason. At first she thought there was more dark, more evil, in him than there was good. While he had complimented her, he'd somehow managed to insult her in the same breath. Not to mention he was the one who had injured two innocent Shinigami, dragged her to Hueco Mundo, rubbed in her face the fact her friends were supposedly dead, hurt Ichigo--the list went on.

Only when she was back in the world of the living, staring at her own crescent moon, did she realize how wrong she had been.

The darkness she'd seen in him wasn't true darkness. His facade of cold indifference hid something more. She didn't know what that something was; she could tell some of it wasn't pure, as she had originally thought, but not all of it. She had seen some light, some good, in him during his final battle with Ichigo. At the time, she'd been too worried about her friends to notice, but he had helped them, in his own way, more times than he should have if he truly was their enemy. Orihime found herself wanting to know more, to know why.

She wanted to know the crescent moon.

But now it was too late. The moon had changed, faded into a new moon, invisible to the naked eye.

And how she wept because of it.
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Author's Comments

This is what happens when ILMB suffers from insomnia. Though it is nice to be able to write a one-shot that will stay a one-shot.


I was trying to write a more realistic Orihime POV of how she would feel about Ulquiorra, instead of how UlquiHime fans interpret his actions towards her. Because let's be honest: I'm sure she would see Ulquiorra as the antagonizer, at least when she was still in Las Noches. Maybe after his "death" her perspective would have changed, but before that? I'm sure she cast him as the villain.


And I promise I will try not to compare Ulquiorra to the moon ever again, since I've done that twice already.






Ulquiorra and Orihime © Tite Kubo
Story © =ilovemybishies87

Critiques


:iconmarchhatter:
I enjoyed this piece of writing for many reasons.
I am not going to start yelling OMG ORIxULI GAH!
I munna write something constructive for you

I loved the analogy of the moon, comparing it to their experiences and possible love. I enjoyed how it worked torwards the new moon, death and complete darkness but starts something new at the same time.

I just want to say keep on at it and keep up the metaphors and writing work and themes.

I am not here to comfort you emotionally or PHYSICALLY >_> <_< >_>

Best Wishes,
MarchHatter

PS the critique is telling me I need 100 words so I will just ramble on about Syazel and something else and how I want to see Shinji again in the comic and something something have a great day.
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:icongreatkingrat88:
Short, romantic in a sorrowful fashion and rather poetic.

As far as UlquiHime one-shots go, I rather like this.

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:iconfoozicle:
this gives me shivers. and that's a good thing :)
i am still hoping kubo will somehow bring him back

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:iconilovemybishies87:
Thank you. Wow, this is so weird to hear you say you like UlquiHime writings. Then again, they aren't squishy romantic, so that might be part of it...

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:iconilovemybishies87:
Thank you. :) I'm glad to hear that.

I'm sure Kubo will, because he just cannot let a character die a meaningful death--er, I mean, he wants good characters to stay alive.

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Life makes us realize there is nothing in the world truly perfect. But through that imperfection, we can find beauty.

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Crack pairings are all about possibilities, not inevitabilities.
:icongreatkingrat88:
I hate to sound like a sycophant, but it IS you. You have a knack for writing well, even when it isn't a topic I'm all that keen on reading.

And yes, the lack of fluff is an appeal.

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:iconfujitsu01:
Nicely done! It's definitely a realistic reaction from Orihime, especially after she's had some time to think.

The only thing that bugs me, and this is incredibly minor, is your use of "how" in the last line. It breaks the flow of the story for me, but I can't really explain why. It just feels out of place. If it was me, I would have used the word "now" again, but of course, it's your story, and you have no obligation to change it just because of me.

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:iconilovemybishies87:
And yes, the lack of fluff is an appeal.
I knew it! Then again, I think we had this conversation yesterday, didn't we?

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Life makes us realize there is nothing in the world truly perfect. But through that imperfection, we can find beauty.

Crack shipping means never having to give a reason. :heart:

Crack pairings are all about possibilities, not inevitabilities.
:icongreatkingrat88:
We did!

But seriously, the writing is good, and considering how starved fanfiction in general is of that, that *really* matters.

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:iconilovemybishies87:
Thank you.

Maybe because it makes it sound overly dramatic?

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Life makes us realize there is nothing in the world truly perfect. But through that imperfection, we can find beauty.

Crack shipping means never having to give a reason. :heart:

Crack pairings are all about possibilities, not inevitabilities.
:iconfujitsu01:
You're welcome!

I admit, that was my first impression. Then again, Orihime has a tendency to be dramatic, so maybe it does fit. :shrug: I don't know.

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